1000 Excuses

[__freya__]

kk am feelin kinda safe as it it seems no one actually reads these things lol well all a can say is this started off going to be a song it still might is just messy an needs a major rewrite an a chorus

anways this is a rough version

livin in a world of a thousand fears
livin in the memory of a thousand tears
an so a cross myself an pray
in the nothing i got to say
try an get thru another day
waiting for forgivness for a thousand years

in a thousand sins that we abide
in a thousand lies that we hide
in blood stained hands i cried
in the nothing that i tried
a religion lost an then denied
a thousand savours wept an died

livin in a world of a thousand screams
livin a world of a thousand broken dreams
on the sword that caught my fall
in the name i never call
god save us one an all
as a thousand hopes just disappears

torn apart by a thousand hateful seeds
divided by a thousand diferent needs
an so i load the gun
in the nothing i ever done
burnt by an ever scorching sun
drowning in the fires of a thousand bleeds

an so i close my eyes
the wind carries on a thousand sighs
searching for at least one sighn
in the nothing that i find
as a thousand souls burn to touch the sky
a thousand questions yearn to ask why

[tommysize1]

decent POEM

i swear most songs on the radio dont even rhyme.
plus most are written to music. id bet 90% easy.

without the music in mind its easy to lose the rhythm.

i just tried singing it (in my head) to oasis - songbird.....bits of it fit.
has that kinda feel to it i thought.... sombre?

[__freya__]

a think with this am tryin to describe those times wen the world just seems soo much bigger than youself an tho you moan or maybe even sometimes scared an worried about the way it all seems be going

you know also you dont actually do anything proactive about it <<<that all kinda makes sense in me head lol

the really hard thing about poetry an rhyming is makin it rhyme wile keeping to the point or story you trying to tell but then thats the skill init

is a poem that dont ryhme really a poem ? or just wot they call creative writing

[tommysize1]

i only like poems when they rhyme.
hycoo?
couplets?
stanzas?
i couldn't even tell you which things are nouns, verbs & adjectives.

just write for the fun of it and let others classify it (like me!)

and what your saying does make sense.
and by writing your thoughts and turning them into something entertaining IS proactive! might make someone think about it and they might become inspired by it and go out and make a change. you never know .

although your poem thing doesnt actually sound very inspirational....just kinda depressing lol

[__freya__]

depressing !!! WTF lol that aint nooo way depressing tho a can do depressing quite well

think most poems a ever read are actually on the dark side an am deffo not into ya rainbows flowers an fluffy bunnies stuff BLEH

but maybe the depressing ones is easier to write